Dreams!

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  1. 09-12-08 #1
    cleansweep3
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    Dreams!

    Here is a little poem

    Please take a little time and read it

    Dreams

    Thanks for reading
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  3. 09-12-08 #2
    KyleEnos
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    Re: Dreams!

    Eh...

    No imagery.
    Too much repetition.
    A bit tedious.

    Sounds more like you're selling a product, rather than elequently and fluently describing dreams.
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  4. 09-12-08 #3
    troublemaker1111
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    Re: Dreams!

    this is more like a beginner's guide to dreaming than a poem
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