and read my poems and comment plz :D I will put more on it when I find them in my messy room.....
http://www.myspace.com/darkheartsforever
and read my poems and comment plz :D I will put more on it when I find them in my messy room.....
http://www.myspace.com/darkheartsforever
i would add you...but im setting a goal not to log on to my myspace for 1-2 week :D
why would you not log on for 1-2 weeks?
dunno it's boring and i do it for fun
mypsace has become fill with emos, then i just got tired of it
i dont want aids, post ur poems here
If anything is missed spelled or I used the wrong word for the meaning I ment then please tell me and I'll fix it. Thanks for your thoughts on it.
Gaara's Debts:
You look in the face of mankind and stare, wondering where you've gone.
The truth never left a scar so deep that the eyes of the beholder could not weep.
You wonder why your like this you wonder how you became this.
You ask yourself why am I a monster?
The day was never so hard that you couldnt walk with the help of loved ones you were at lost.
You were alone from start to end,but you have yet to begin.
The day was never so dark you could not see.
With the eyes of hate you would bleed.
The night came as fast as day went.
You blamed them all for your depletment.
Your thoughts were as low as they could get.
You lie awake wondering when the day will come when you'll begin.
Death God's Duty:
Dream of a day life begins and find out soon when it ends.
For I'm a death god without a doubt.
With a wave of my reaver it will shout.
Out its name is what you'll hear.
And if you can bare its screech so loud.
Scream it back to make it reach.
A height so high that no one can seek.
The power that you have is what you need.
So rely on it and you will see.
That your the one to end this war.
Heaven Hell:
Is there a heaven or a hell?
For that truth I cant unveil.
If I did the world surly would go to hell.
Because my answer would be no.
For nothing is up or down below.
Time:
The past is what you've done.
While the future is what you'll become.
Theres no use in ignoreing it because you'll have to indoor it.
While you work hard in your life.
You'll find out that you have the might.
To show the ones you love.
That you'll be alright.
Hardship will come and they'll pass.
Just be happy they'll end up in the past.
Live On:
I am Darkhearts, for this I've known.
That when I die I wont become the unknown.
Even if I chose to die alone.
Through the sea I shall not be unknown.
Fron this story I'm about to tell, you will leave without a shell.
A shell of respect is what you need, which you shall receive.
Read my story read it well. Read it to the end and you will tell.
That will not be the unkown.
From this story you will be the known.
In the begining you will see that lif eis nothing it seemed to be.
That you made a deal you'll have to keep, that in the end you will sleep.
Long before the slumber comes you will chose what you've done.
Do whats bests do whats right because you never know what comes after you die.
This is my story , this is my life.
Follow it well and dont ask why.
My name is Darkhearts and I will not die, because I'm in the mind of the readers.
Last edited by cameronmd; 01-03-06 at 02:18 AM.
the layout of your poems are crap its all squishy seperate it !!
your good poems:Time,
your bad poems: heaven hell because its short and dont make much sense lol and you dont talk about heaven, Death God's Duty; because its all like you made those . for no reason you dont start a new sentence or line
unkown:Gaara's Debts didnt read lol
fine I'll make diff lines >.> happy?
those two bad ones you said are ones I made in like 3-5mins and didnt try hard...
Live On and time are the first two I did. Took about 1hr to make them both >.<
Poems are lam0, porns is better.
myspace is gay, they can give ur entire whatever to fox. :P
Indeed! :smileysexOriginally Posted by gReGiTh
[Quote=cameronmd]Gaara's Debts:
You look in the face of mindkind and stare, wondering where you've gone.
mindkind? o.O
lol ment mankind or w/e >.> I dont spell good so blah
ps: your all being mean and not staying ontopic!!!
i am you asked us to help correct any mistakes o.o
didnt read them all but read a couple and most you have rhymes and your poems have really no rhyme scheme >.<
fixed some things in that
Last edited by vinzone; 01-03-06 at 02:31 AM.
Not the fact you fixed my spelling and stuff but that fact that everyone aint staying on topic and talking about porn when I'm talking about poems.
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