A Story I Wrote When I Was 9 (DEATH)

[maplepuppet]

DEATH

Story Outline


Basiclly this is a story I wrote 4 years ago about a kid losing his mom to his dad and trying to save her by going through scary movies. It was wrote when I was 9 so don't expect great spelling or anything. Anyways, I thought it was kinda interesting because I forgot about it until now. Anyways you can read it if you desire.

Chapter 1

John was walking home from school and as he was, he saw a see through man shaped object pass by at the speed of light. He glared to the left and saw a creepy house with rotted wood. He glanced in the one window of the house and saw the same see through shape. John ran to his home as fast as he could. When he got home he told his mom about the shape. As terrified as she was she said there

 

[theninjaway]

OK, post it normally, it looks faggy like that.

 

[maplepuppet]

OK, post it normally, it looks faggy like that.

The deed is done.

 

[theninjaway]

Doesn't sound like a story from a nine year old, sounds like some Saw themed story.

 

[maplepuppet]

Well I wrote it when I was 9 cause I always loved horror movies.

 

[blyddlyl]

So basically this story is about a kid trying to save his mom and dad? not bad for a 9 year old ^^

 

[wounded]

Hmm not bad for a 9 year old.
So how old are you now 11 12?
Because yeah...that last bit really resembles Saw 2.
Pretty dark story for a 9 year old, you should be writing about happy shit.

 

[YouAreNotBob]

Hmm not bad for a 9 year old.
So how old are you now 11 12?
Because yeah...that last bit really resembles Saw 2.
Pretty dark story for a 9 year old, you should be writing about happy shit.

Basiclly this is a story I wrote 4 years ago

9+4=13

Weird, at your age I was reading about dogs talking to other dogs making friends with other dogs. I myself am not a fan of horror movies/stories at night, so I'll probably read this tommorow and edit this post after I read it

 

[Savage]

Did you copy and paste? Or did you rewrite it right now? Because, incredible grammar for a 9 year old, even a 13 year old.

 

[maplepuppet]

Did you copy and paste? Or did you rewrite it right now? Because, incredible grammar for a 9 year old, even a 13 year old.

I wrote it when I was nine, and had it saved on my mom's comp. She never got rid of it and I just found it and I thought it was interesting, so I posted it. Yes I copy and pasted exactly what I wrote when I was 9.

 

[theninjaway]

Yeah, I doubt he wrote it when he was nine, this is an extremely dark story for a nine year old, I think he just wrote it, and added in childish shit like the boogeyman. How does a nine year old know about fuckin guns and shit?

 

[Konrow]

Kind of stereotypical horror and not very well planned out. I can tell you're definitely a start up writer. I wrote in a similar fashion when I only began to write my stories. The suspense needed isn't there, the description are amateur, but hey you're young and just need more experience. You'll find yourself going back when you're 17/18 maybe even 20 to these stories and editing the shit out of them. I know that's what i did and now i have a few pretty kickass stories. Keep writing if you enjoy it and you'll see your ideas begin to develop a lot more clearly on paper.

 

[maplepuppet]

Yeah, I doubt he wrote it when he was nine, this is an extremely dark story for a nine year old, I think he just wrote it, and added in childish shit like the boogeyman. How does a nine year old know about fuckin guns and shit?

I was 9 years old though, I ust to watch all the horror movies with my bro and I found them facinating. And I've always been good with words so I wrote a story, and I was 9. I am much better at writing now though. And I think you're jelous maybe?

Kind of stereotypical horror and not very well planned out. I can tell you're definitely a start up writer. I wrote in a similar fashion when I only began to write my stories. The suspense needed isn't there, the description are amateur, but hey you're young and just need more experience. You'll find yourself going back when you're 17/18 maybe even 20 to these stories and editing the shit out of them. I know that's what i did and now i have a few pretty kickass stories. Keep writing if you enjoy it and you'll see your ideas begin to develop a lot more clearly on paper.

I know what you mean, thanks btw.

 

[theninjaway]

I was 9 years old though, I ust to watch all the horror movies with my bro and I found them facinating. And I've always been good with words so I wrote a story, and I was 9. I am much better at writing now though. And I think you're jelous maybe?



I know what you mean, thanks btw.

Jealous of what? I'm not pursuing writing, or anything in the field. I'm pursuing technology, athletics and music. Anyway, you must've been psycho to have those types of thoughts at 9.

 

[Netrogor]

Your introduction is weak, as well as your overall use of conventional grammar. Spelling is okay, but that goes to show that you took a great deal of time on it when you had made it. It is better to get a great deal of ideas out on paper, with a number of spelling mistakes and the likes, and review which ideas you want to keep, which to toss out, and what might need to be added. That is the purpose of having a rough draft.

I don't see why people find this particularly unique, given the age... it appears to be the same quality as the stories my classmates in third grade wrote (when I was eight). Just a paragraph longer.

And because it is obvious that you are trying to brag, and show off...

And I think you're jelous maybe?

When I was eleven, I wrote a three-hundred and fifty-six page short story as a class project, using an old style typewriter a grandma gave me. It was a fantasy based work, so I had plenty of excuses to use colorful wording. I ended up getting slotted in advanced classes up until my Sophomore year in high school, when I got tired and dropped out (two years ago). I then moved in with a brother of mine, who is a grad student getting his Master's in Math and Electrical Engineering at Michigan State University, and studied alongside him for awhile. There - no bragging rights for you. ^^

None for me either - take note, I am a one time drop out. Regardless of my own pursuits, dropping out cannot be excused. Delays life goals too much.

EDIT:
On a side note... on the computer, I can type about ~220 words per minute, with 100% accuracy in spelling. If I type as fast as I can, while maintaining a comprehensible idea, spelling and all, I sometimes forget certain words I intended to put in. Even entire sentences. I've noticed that it isn't so much because of how fast I type, but because it is as fast as I can type. I know kids who go through the same thing I do, when they are typing around ~40 wpm. If they pace themselves, like I do, and type at about half of their capable, accurate speed... they don't miss words or entire sentences. I wonder how long it would take me to move my short story from paper to computer... I would undoubtedly butcher it with editing.

 

[troublemaker1111]

yes well when I was 7 I wrote 28 best sellers and 19 broadway musicals along with several manuals on civil engineering and a working schematic for a time machine.

all written on parchment with a quill in fine calligraphy, using ink made from the blood of endangered species that I had personally hunted and killed with my bare feet.

 

[Genryu]

yes well when I was 7 I wrote 28 best sellers and 19 broadway musicals along with several manuals on civil engineering and a working schematic for a time machine.

all written on parchment with a quill in fine calligraphy, using ink made from the blood of endangered species that I had personally hunted and killed with my bare feet.

Twice that much when I was still in mommy.

 

[Jamie]

Yeah, I doubt he wrote it when he was nine, this is an extremely dark story for a nine year old, I think he just wrote it, and added in childish shit like the boogeyman. How does a nine year old know about fuckin guns and shit?

Fuck off bahamas fag.

Great story, and it does resemble Saw.

 

[maplepuppet]

Twice that much when I was still in mommy.

Lol =P

 

[CarterFTWWW]

yes well when I was 7 I wrote 28 best sellers and 19 broadway musicals along with several manuals on civil engineering and a working schematic for a time machine.

all written on parchment with a quill in fine calligraphy, using ink made from the blood of endangered species that I had personally hunted and killed with my bare feet.

kk.

Your introduction is weak, as well as your overall use of conventional grammar. Spelling is okay, but that goes to show that you took a great deal of time on it when you had made it. It is better to get a great deal of ideas out on paper, with a number of spelling mistakes and the likes, and review which ideas you want to keep, which to toss out, and what might need to be added. That is the purpose of having a rough draft.

I don't see why people find this particularly unique, given the age... it appears to be the same quality as the stories my classmates in third grade wrote (when I was eight). Just a paragraph longer.

And because it is obvious that you are trying to brag, and show off...

When I was eleven, I wrote a three-hundred and fifty-six page short story as a class project, using an old style typewriter a grandma gave me. It was a fantasy based work, so I had plenty of excuses to use colorful wording. I ended up getting slotted in advanced classes up until my Sophomore year in high school, when I got tired and dropped out (two years ago). I then moved in with a brother of mine, who is a grad student getting his Master's in Math and Electrical Engineering at Michigan State University, and studied alongside him for awhile. There - no bragging rights for you. ^^

None for me either - take note, I am a one time drop out. Regardless of my own pursuits, dropping out cannot be excused. Delays life goals too much.

EDIT:
On a side note... on the computer, I can type about ~220 words per minute, with 100% accuracy in spelling. If I type as fast as I can, while maintaining a comprehensible idea, spelling and all, I sometimes forget certain words I intended to put in. Even entire sentences. I've noticed that it isn't so much because of how fast I type, but because it is as fast as I can type. I know kids who go through the same thing I do, when they are typing around ~40 wpm. If they pace themselves, like I do, and type at about half of their capable, accurate speed... they don't miss words or entire sentences. I wonder how long it would take me to move my short story from paper to computer... I would undoubtedly butcher it with editing.

Nice to know?

Uhh, I guess it's ok. Didn't catch me though. Do you still try to write stories now?